Congestive Heart Failure finished

just finished revising Congestive Heart Failure, an ‘immediate future’ short story. it’s not really science fiction, though it does extrapolate. i wrote the first draft of this story back in the mid-90’s, and it surprised me with its timeliness, both then and now. of course, that’s just be my biased opinion.

it’s not a terribly happy piece, though i like to think that the light at the end of the tunnel is more not just a train. the revision process for this one basically covered two areas: overall fat-trimming and how hard to push that light at the end of the tunnel. i ultimately ended with a lighter touch, which is my general preference, but sometimes, because i know what’s going on, my light touch is actually a bare whisp of a mention to the reader, but i think it’s the right tack for this one. so now it’s time to find a market and get it out there!

also, there was progress made on a revised query letter for NGD, but, like last time, i’ll be taking the weekend before sending it out. it’s hard to believe a whole week has gone by since i was last flipping out over the final (first) query letter. this version is much leaner (notice a trend?) and i’m worried it is too lean, but i need to get away from trying to squash the entire contents into a single letter. it’s impossible.

anyway, i’m late to work.