but that was a really cool scene!

too bad it just doesn’t belong in the story. (i chopped a small side scene out of the story, changing a face-to-face conversation to over-the phone.)

or does it? (i hemmed and hawed and put it back in.)

no, it doesn’t. (i took it back out.)

but does it have to be either or? (i put part back in, but kept the new over-the-phone conversation.)

hm. i guess it doesn’t. (i was finally able to move on to the next page.)

ah, revision.